As the water whips my face I see another mountain we have to climb in our old rickety cart. "This water park has been around for so long I am surprised that we haven’t been killed by ghosts of something," says Zell“Yeah I was thinking the same,” follows Jane, "maybe there's like a haunted house around here that we could go to after we get off this old piece of wood..."
As the four children slowly approach the haunted house they see two eyes peer out the entrance, it happens again but this time it speaks.
"What are you doing here", the children are flabbergasted to find out that it could speak. " We are here to save the lost spirit" Announces Zell. "No We Aren't" declares Lilly. " anyway, we want to explore this place" exclaims Joan !
Then the peer of eyes said Creepily " come on in children, you will be just fine " To Be Continued.......
So did you like my description?
If you did, please feel free to comment down below and tell me what I could improve in next time. My favourite part of the writing was being able to come up with a story based of the photos we had! Have you done 'Moment In Time' writing before? If you have what was your favourite part. I like Narrative writing because there are no limits as to what you do, where as in moment in time you're stuck in a certain time.
If you did, please feel free to comment down below and tell me what I could improve in next time. My favourite part of the writing was being able to come up with a story based of the photos we had! Have you done 'Moment In Time' writing before? If you have what was your favourite part. I like Narrative writing because there are no limits as to what you do, where as in moment in time you're stuck in a certain time.
Please Feel free to leave a positive, thoughtful and helpful comment. Have a Great long weekend. Blog you later, Bye!
Good morning Abby,
ReplyDeleteHow has your day been so far? My name is Bella and I attend to Papakura Central School and I am a year 6. Great work! I really like how you layed out your writing and how you added images. Next time you could write what inspired you to write this story. Great work though, Keep it up !
Blog you later,
Bella :)
Thank you Bella,
DeleteI Have had a great morning so far.
I will definitely write what inspired e next time !
Have a Lovely Day!
- Abby